I know places!

Today is Prompt Day for “Blogging 101”.

We needed to create a post from a prompt on the Daily Post. Mine was; PLACES – Beach, Mountains, forest or somwhere else.

This got me thinking about my ideal place to write.

“A woman must have money and a room of her own if she is to write fiction.”

– Virginia Woolf.

There are many posts about where we writer’s choose to write. But, if you are anything like me, you’re hearing the call to your native land but are financially incapable of owning more than a pencil.

Therefore I have to pretend. Luckily, as a writer and Procrastinator extraordinaire, I am extremely good at this. So here is my IDEAL place to write.

Please feel free to come in…

My vanilla-coloured house nestles between pink and warm malted terraces like a neopolitan. Its bay window opens out onto the quayside. Ropes bounce against the masts of yachts called things like ‘Dreamcatcher’ and ‘The Marianne’. They make a delightful ‘chinking’ melody.

Seagulls zoom through the air. Their signature squawk, like a childs play horn, carries on the air as they look for unsuspecting tourists carelessly eating sandwiches. The scent of seafood drifts through the open window from the fresh fish stand across the harbour. Cockles, salty, with their yellow frill and muscles that seem to still hold an entire beach full of sand when you put them in your mouth. 

The swish of gentle waves lapping at the keels create a kind of lullaby and I close the window – because I’ve got work to do.

I lived in Weymouth when I was a child and my memories of hot summers on the beach, sand sculptures before they were trendy and walks to the ice cream shop at the end of the pier (sadly gone now) still live with me .

I hope to get back there one day (maybe I’ll win the lottery!). But in the meantime when I want to disappear, I put on my music, close my eyes and I’m there.

Where is your IDEAL place?

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Dynamic Dialogue!

It’s day nine of ‘blogging 101’ and we needed to build on one of the comments we’d made from the previous day.

I chose an article on Roz Morris’ blog ‘Nail Your Novel.’

She discussed clumsy dialogue and how to improve your scenes by leaving out more than you put in. I am in the editing stages of a novel that I intend to put on Wattpad. So I thought I would give her idea a go. Here are the results;

First stage: Re-write dialogue in a clumsy way, telling everything in the scene.

‘Do you need any help?’ The boy grinned at her.

Jessie scowled. ‘I had it under control.’

‘Yeah the way you stopped his teeth with your arm was genius. You would’ve been dead if it weren’t for me.’ He yanked her to her feet. The wolf fell aside and Jessie brushed herself off.

‘If you hadn’t been wandering about in the first place, it would never have happened.’ She scowled at him.

‘A simple thank you would do,’ he said. ‘My name’s Alec.’ He held his hand out to shake hers. Jessie ignored him.

‘Hey, I just saved your life,’ he said.

‘Thank you,’ she replied, pulling out her axe and bringing it down on the animal’s neck. ‘But for the record, you didn’t save my life.’

‘I feel sick,’ he said.

‘Well stand somewhere else,’ she snapped, shoving the now severed head into her red bag.

Alec stared at her. ‘Who are you?’

Now I was instructed to highlight all the dialogue in colour. The I was to rewrite, ommitting the clumsy, obvious speech and including action and body language.

Here’s the final version:

                      ‘Lucky I came along.’ The boy grinned, exposing a crooked front tooth.

Jessie scowled. ‘I had it under control.’

‘Yeah, the way you stopped his teeth with your arm was genius.’ He held out his hand. ‘My name’s Alec.’

‘How nice for you,’ said Jessie, jumping to her feet. She grabbed her axe and brought it down on the animal’s neck with a sickening crack!

The boy turned away. ‘I saved your life,’ he said. ‘The least you could do is say thank you.’ His voice croaked and Jessie thought she detected a slight tremble.

She sneered. ‘You didn’t save my life.’

Blood dripped onto the ground as she stuffed the severed head into her bag. The boy swayed a little.

Yanking the drawstring tight, she swung it over her shoulder. The wolf’s body lay next to Alec’s feet. She pulled out a silver bottle and poured oil over the corpse, splashing the boy’s shoes.

‘I’d move away if I were you,’ she said, lighting a match.

Alec’s eyes widened. ‘You’re not from animal control are you?’

‘No,’ she said, fixing her brilliant green eyes on his. ‘I’m not.’

Now the scene is shorter, but gives more information even though I’ve actually taken dialogue out. I’ve avoided questions, given actions instead of answers and vreated an overall cleaner scene…I hope.

I welcome any feedback and would love to know if anyone else has tried this and got better results.

In the meantime, thank you for reading, and happy writing 🙂

Blogs, blogs everywhere…

…and not enough time to read!

There are so many great blogs on here and I’m spending so much time on the Reader, I think I’m on the cusp of a new obsession.

Day 8 of ‘blogging 101’ asks us to comment on four blogs we’ve never commented on before. So I decided to log them here, not just because I’ve commented, but because they are such great sites I coudn’t help but share them 🙂

1. Hey Look a Writer Fellow

Mike Allegra is a children’s book writer. This post is asking for people to comment on what fictional pet they would have and why. Your name then gets put into a ballot box and you could win your very own doodle! So Jump on if you get chance and take a look at this very entertaining blog 🙂

2. Nail Your Novel.

Author Roz Morris discusses everything you need to ‘Nail Your Novel.’ If you’re writing a novel, you NEED to visit this site.

3. Life is Nice.

Some great recipes on here, including Cupcake in a mason jar and the oven baked zucchini fries – must try them 🙂

4. Exospection.

This writer has set themselves the task of writing 300 haikus in one year. I especially love The Rabbit Hole 🙂

I hope you enjoy these blogs as much as I have,

See you soon and Happy Writing!

I’m a failure!

It’s something we don’t talk about enough, but without it we’d never experience our biggest successes.

Failure is what drives us to do more, be more and push ourselves beyond the limits we thought were possible.

“When people succeed they tend to party, when they fail, they tend to ponder”

                                                                                         – Tony Robbins

Each time I send out a piece of work thats rejected, I’ve found one more way not to do it. And as a result I keep honing, polishing and adapting. And I will continue to do so til I get a yes, partly because I’m stubborn and partly because I believe if I bug them enough they WILL give in eventually 😉

Failure is something we don’t focus on enough in life and yet it’s what gives us our greatest strength. If you’ve ever shown your work to your third year english teacher you’ll know that nothing can ever make you feel that insignificant again.

So when you fail, hold your head high, celebrate with your hands up and shout it from the rooftops, because you’ve just taken one step closer to your success.

And if you don’t believe me, take it from a lady who knows!

This is me!

The children are all napping, so I have a few rare moments to complete my first assignment for “blogging 101” without something being thrown at my head.

I am a mum of three boys, one of which only has two speeds, ninety miles an hour and stop. Most of my days are spent referreeing, playing superheroes and talking to myself.

In the evening I morph into a normal human being, (well the closest thing to it anyway). Tea drinking, writing and pretending to not watch the telly.

I started a blog to build my online presence and improve my writing skills. I mostly write about writing, as I’m not very good at anything else, and some would argue I’m not very good at that either.

Organisation is a big thing for me as I have so little time. If I find a method that works I like to let other people know in case it works for them too.

I’m hoping to take my blog to the next level and actually post more than once per millenia. Consistency has been a life-long issue for me. Therefore I welcome any advice or tips if anyone has any to share.

Thanks for reading!